Contrasting -2 -revised

  In order to fill a vacant position with an instructor, I am designated to choose one person for my school, and there are two people, Lynn Whitnal and Debra Fines, who come out on top in the final section.  I've made up my mind to hire Lynn Whitnal as a consequence of the following reasons.  To begin with, Debra has three education experiences; in contrast, Lynn has only one.  As a result, I can infer that Debra has known more knowledge than Lynn.  In addition, whereas Lynn has three employment experiences, Debra has five in total; nevertheless, there are both two which are related to English instructor.  Moreover, different from Debra who is fluent in two languages, Lynn is fluent in two more languages, Spanish and Japanese.  Last and most important, while Debra has issued a publication of English Verb Tenses, Lynn was given the honor of Excellence in Teaching in 2004, which is a critical factor that makes me decide to hire her.  To sum up, in my opinion, if a person is awarded prizes, his or her ability is proved in the way, which is of great importance; since that Lynn corresponds with that, it's no doubt that she is the most appropriate person to get the job.

Contrasting -1 -revised

   My friend and I were so fortunate that we were both admitted to the best university.  As a consequence, we are now searching for an ideal place for us to live in the future.  After hours of comparing, we consider Fairfax Apartments and CAMPUS APTS the most suitable ones; nevertheless, there are some differences between them.  To begin with, whereas there are two large bedrooms in Fairfax Apartments , there is only one bedroom in CAMPUS APTS; however, it's in large modern building, and owing to whether we should share the room, we have to take this into consideration.  In addition, different from the latter, the former is air conditioned and furnished.  Moreover, it's not allowed to keep pets in Fairfax Apartments; in contrast, there is no problem for us to keep pets in CAMPUS APTS.  Last but not the least, Fairfax Apartments costs $1250 per month and it's available from Sept.1. On the other hand, CAMPUS APTS costs merely $900 per month and it's avaible immediately.  Based on the unlikeness above, we think that Fairfax Apartments is more satisfying than CAMPUS APTS, which is mainly on account of the bedrooms.

Comparing -3 -revised

  Max and Alexander are the most popular singers who are attractive to people of all ages in Taiwan now.  As a consequence, Ann Lee, who has a fine reputation in the world as a director, is determined to choose one to star his latest movie.  To my surprise, there is some resemblance between them.  First of all, Max made his debut and achieved remarkable success on March 27,2007 which is the same date as Alexander's.  In addition, Max plays an important role in the hottest TV series now; likewise, Alexander plays in it now.  What's more, they were both awarded Best Actor Award last year.  Moreover, Max's birth date is similar to that of Alexander.  In conclusion, there are too many coincidences; thus, it's so incredible that I think of  it is a difficult decision to Ann Lee; nevertheless, I believe that he will absolutely make a good choice in the end.

Expressing an opinion -2

  When it comes to whether students should wear uniforms to school, I am favor of the opposite side.  To begin with, in my opinion, every student insists on his or her own style of clothes; as a result, if schools don't limit the students to uniforms, it will be a mess in the campus.  In addition, I find it convenient to tell which school the students come from; owing to this, they will behave themselves outside.  Moreover, as long as it won't be a trouble to worry about what to wear the next day, it does save a lot of time on choosing the clothes every morning.  Last but not the least, since students all wear the same uniforms, the security in the campus will make both their parents and the teachers can breathe a sing of relief as the strangers who may want to commit crimes will be easily recognized.  To sum up, I believe that the benefits that students wearing uniforms brings are absolutely more.

Expressing an opinion -1

  With the popularity of Internet developing more and more widely, it provides people with a brand-new access to date with someone else.  Nevertheless, some people think of meeting people through online dating sites  as an inappropriate way.  On account of the following reasons, I'm against it, either.  To start with, the Internet is the virtual space; as a result, the rate of being cheated on the Net is definitely higher, and the criminals may regard it as another access to commit crimes.  For example, they will use a fake name, and tell a lot if lies on purpose of making people believe them so that it will be easier for them to get money from people.  In addition, meeting people through online dating sites limits people to a certain way of dealing with people; thus, they will lack the opportunities of communicating with others in person.  What' more, it enables us to be unable to express our real selves.  Most important of all, we can't have a variety of memories, the only kind of which will be sitting in front of the computer and typing words instead of creating such memories as playing water on the beach or taking a trip to a foreign country together.  In conclusion, in my opinion, humans are born to learn to interact with others; therefore, meeting people through online dating sites will keep us from that.

Contrasting -2

  In order to offer a vacant position for an English instructor, I am designated to choose one person in the extensive competition held by my company, and there are two people, Lynn Whitnal and Debra Fines, who come out on top in the final section.  I've made up my mind to hire Lynn Whitnal as a consequence of the following reasons.  To begin with, Debra has three education experiences; in contrast, Lynn has only one.  As a result, I can infer that Debra has known more knowledge than Lynn.  In addition, whereas Lynn three employment experiences, Debra has five in total; nevertheless, there are both two which are related to English instructor.  Moreover, different from Debra, Lynn is fluent in two more languages, Spanish and Japanese.  Last and most important, while Debra has issued a publication of English Verb Tenses, Lynn was given the honor of Excellence in Teaching in 2004, which is a critical factor that makes me decide to hire her.  To sum up, in my opinion, if a person is awarded prizes, his or her ability is proved in the way, which are of great importance; since that Lynn corresponds to that, it;s no doubt that she is the most appropriate person to get the job.

Contrasting -1

  My friend and I were so fortunate that we were both admitted to the best university.  As a consequence, we are now searching for an ideal place for us to live in the future.  After hours of comparing, we consider Fairfax Apartments and CAMPUS APTS the most suitable ones; nevertheless, there are some differences between them.  To begin with, whereas there are two large bedrooms in Fairfax Apartments , there is only one bedroom in CAMPUS APTS; however, it's in large modern building, and owing to whether we should share the room, we have to take this into consideration.  In addition, different from the latter, the former is air conditioned and furnished.  Moreover, it's not allowed to keep pets in Fairfax Apartments; in contrast, there is no problem for us to keep pets in CAMPUS APTS.  Last but not the least, Fairfax Apartments costs $1250 per month and it's avaible from Sept.1. On the other hand, CAMPUS APTS costs merely $900 per month and it's avaible immediately.  Based on the unlikeness above, we think that Fairfax Apartments is more satisfying than CAMPUS APTS, which is mainly on account of the bedrooms.

Comparing -3

  Max and Alexander are the most popular singer who are attractive to people of all ages in Taiwan now.  As a consequence, Ann Lee, who has a fine reputation in the world as a director, is determined to choose one to take part in his latest movie.  To my surpries, there is some resemblance between them.  First of all, Max made his debut and achieved remarkable success on March 27,2007 which is the same date as Alexander's.  In addition, Max plays an important role in the hottest TV series now; likewise, Alexander plays in it now.  What's more, they were both awarded Best Actor Award last year.  Moreover, Max's birth date is similar to that of Alexander.  In conclusion, there are too many coincidences; thus, it's so incredible that I believe it is a difficult decision to Ann Lee.

Comparing - 2 -revised

  John Adams as well as Thomas Jefferson was alike in several ways; as a consequence, the following biographical informations are about both the two great presidents of the United States.  First of all, John Adams played an important role in the American Revolution, which was similar to Thomas Jefferson.  Moreover, they both were delegates to the Continental Congress.  What's more, John Adams was the signer of Declaration of Independence; likewise, Thomas Jefferson was the signer of Declaration of Independence.  In addition, John Adams, the same as Thomas Jefferson, studied and practiced law.  Last but not the least, John Adams died on July 4 in 1826.  Similarly, Thomas Jefferson died on July 4 in 1826.  In conclusion, with the analysis of the two presidents, I believe that not only have you had clear ideas about them, but you have known why they were respected by the general public.

Comparing - 1 -revised

  When I was going shopping last weekend, there were two clothes catching my eyes.  One of them was sold in LOURIE'S, and the other one was in GREEN'S.  However, on account of the resemblance between them, I couldn't make up my mind to decide which one to buy.  To begin with, they were both machine washable.  Besides, the clothes in LOURIE'S was a blend of cotton; likewise, the clothes in GREEN'S was a blend of cotton.  Next, the former had sizes from 4 to 14, which was similar to the latter.  In addition, their colors were alike; thus, I could choose from the four colors, red, navy, white, and green.  Most important of all, the clothes in LOURIE'S cost as much as the ones in GREEN'S.  To sum up, with the descriptions above, you will find it obvious to know the similarities between them; as a result, I hope that you can lend me a helping hand to make the decision.  Thanks a lot.

My Favorite Season -revised

  Among the four seasons in a year, summer is my favorite one because it has a variety of features which are attractive to me.  To begin with, on account of its torrid weather, it inspires me to be more energetic and have a desire to go outside and do sports, which is good for my health.  Moreover, in this special season, sunflowers, my favorite, as well as many other flowers will bloom beautifully.  Whenever I see them, they always encourage me to have a positive attitude toward my life.  In addition, when summer comes, I will be informed of by the cicadas singing in the trees, which makes me feel as if I were in the forests no matter where I am.  Last but not the least, when it comes to summer, watermelons are the first food that goes through my mind.  There's nothing better than eating the juicy watermelons in such a hot season, bringing me an invigorating feeling.  To sum up, based on these reasons, there are truly several kinds of enjoyment for me to experience, and that's why I love summer so much.