My best friend,Colin, got lost when we took a trip to Korea and went shopping at the Seoul Tower. As a result, I hope the local people to lend me a helping hand and look for her with the following description. To begin with, my friend, Colin, is a sixteen-year-old girl, and she's of average height and slender. In addition, she has some obvious features, for example, the long and curly hair, big eyes, long and slim legs as well as the white skin. When it comes to her big eyes, they are so charming that they not only catch people's attention but also make her look friendly and cute. Moreover, she becomes talkative and excited when she talks about rock bands or what she's interested in. Last but not the least,she's a shy girl; thus, her face often turns red easily, which takes a long time to fade. In conclusion, based on what is mentioned above, it will be more possible and clearly for people to find her. If you have any news about her, please call the phone number: 0912345678.
整篇文章很通順且言簡意該
回覆刪除寫的很好喔
感覺他會快就會被找到了XD
但是不要忘了加個THX~XD
寫的真好
回覆刪除因為聽說寫的很好所以就偷跑來看了XD
我上次看了 沒發現神麼錯誤 但是我沒有給意見ˊ口ˋ
回覆刪除When it comes to her big eyes, they are so charming that they not only catch people's attention but also make her look friendly and cute.這句好害羞(>///<)(>///<)(>///<)
阿阿 想到你沒有寫他穿的衣服
回覆刪除你可以再加一下
寫得.. 很好><!!
回覆刪除連接、轉折詞用的好好欸!!!
ex:When it comes to her big eyes, 我都想不到要把這些學到的詞或片語這樣用,用的真好~~!
每次看你的文章都會!!讚嘆!!=ˋˋ=
寫的真貼切阿~
回覆刪除我找不到錯誤耶...XD
加一句: she is stupid
哈哈哈!
整篇真棒!!
回覆刪除這麼明顯的特徵應該很快就會被找到了 不用擔心:))
最後記得加上報酬或答謝吧 不然他就把她帶回家不用還你了:D
恩恩~寫得很好耶~很生動的描述喔~感覺看的人都能夠一目了然你想要找的人的特徵喔~great!!
回覆刪除got lost when we took a trip to Korea and went shopping at the Seoul Tower.
回覆刪除這句怪怪的~好像是走失了又去逛街~
got lost when we went shopping at the Seoul Tower during our trip to Korea.
會不會比較好呢?
真的是太棒了!!!
形容的十分貼切和仔細=)
感覺看到文章就像看到照片!!!
真的很不錯喔> <