Max and Alexander are the most popular singer who are attractive to people of all ages in Taiwan now. As a consequence, Ann Lee, who has a fine reputation in the world as a director, is determined to choose one to take part in his latest movie. To my surpries, there is some resemblance between them. First of all, Max made his debut and achieved remarkable success on March 27,2007 which is the same date as Alexander's. In addition, Max plays an important role in the hottest TV series now; likewise, Alexander plays in it now. What's more, they were both awarded Best Actor Award last year. Moreover, Max's birth date is similar to that of Alexander. In conclusion, there are too many coincidences; thus, it's so incredible that I believe it is a difficult decision to Ann Lee.
To my surpries, there is some resemblance between them.=>my surprise~
回覆刪除In conclusion, there are too many coincidences;=> In conclusion放在這邊感覺好像可以~但我覺得還是怪怪的~”總而言之”放在這邊感覺比較台灣人的感覺~後面接的句子應該是要放真的小結論的會比較好吧=ˇ=
thus, it's so incredible that I believe it is a difficult decision to Ann Lee.後面可以加上”但是我覺得他一定可以做出最棒的選擇的”~之類的話來增加結尾的完整度喔^口^
take part in 可以用star會不會比較好?
回覆刪除應該是To my(his) surprise(拼錯*ˇ*)
故事內容很棒，很新奇!! 很多句型都不錯，像是結論據．ˇ．
surpries拼錯了是surprises喔~
回覆刪除感覺很像娛樂新聞XD
真酷ㄟ~
其中的比較也很不錯~
開頭和結尾也讓人期待=)
這篇寫得不錯阿 幾乎挑不到什麼錯誤
回覆刪除整體而言還蠻順暢的~
而且你每個句子都好長...
前面的故事編的還不錯(>_<)我喜歡(重點誤
回覆刪除其他的清新自然(把國文課本台詞搬出來用:">)
popular singer >> popular singers
回覆刪除整篇很通順~good!!
take part in --> act
回覆刪除To my surprise
這篇不錯欸 不過他們兩個到底是誰阿??