2011年5月18日 星期三
Contrasting -1
My friend and I were so fortunate that we were both admitted to the best university. As a consequence, we are now searching for an ideal place for us to live in the future. After hours of comparing, we consider Fairfax Apartments and CAMPUS APTS the most suitable ones; nevertheless, there are some differences between them. To begin with, whereas there are two large bedrooms in Fairfax Apartments , there is only one bedroom in CAMPUS APTS; however, it's in large modern building, and owing to whether we should share the room, we have to take this into consideration. In addition, different from the latter, the former is air conditioned and furnished. Moreover, it's not allowed to keep pets in Fairfax Apartments; in contrast, there is no problem for us to keep pets in CAMPUS APTS. Last but not the least, Fairfax Apartments costs $1250 per month and it's avaible from Sept.1. On the other hand, CAMPUS APTS costs merely $900 per month and it's avaible immediately. Based on the unlikeness above, we think that Fairfax Apartments is more satisfying than CAMPUS APTS, which is mainly on account of the bedrooms.
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After hours of comparing, we consider Fairfax Apartments and CAMPUS APTS (are) the most suitable ones
回覆刪除是不是要加are阿~
avaible拼錯了喔~
是available=)
列點和比較清楚><
補充也都很豐富~
又一佳作喔!!!
After hours of comparing時間真短:))
回覆刪除owing to whether we should share the room
owing to + N. 這裡是不是要改一下
倒數第三第四行 available!!
有些句子好長喔 還有四行的欸 不知道行不行了
有頭有委有內容的文章 真棒:D
the most suitable ones >> are the most suitable ones
回覆刪除感覺還差一句結語的樣子xD
Based on the unlikeness above, we think that Fairfax Apartments is more satisfying than CAMPUS APTS, which is mainly on account of the bedrooms. 這一句感覺是原因~可以再加上總結論句會更好喔=))
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